By and copyright of Owen Quinn author of the Time Warriors and Zombie Blues
While I’ve cut whole paragraphs and rewritten story lies, the only time I ever actively cut a section of a story was, The Gift.
The Gift forms part of the story collection in The Moon Once More. No story is ever truly over and there are always aftermaths and trickle resolutios to be eplored. The Gift is one such time as it is a sequel of sorts to the Time Warriors: Tempest.
In that book, the Family launched their attack on Varran and the others and among their targets were family members. Robert, Tyran’s brother, thought Sharon his girlfriend was preganant with his child. In fact, she was an agent for the Family, whose child was really the leader of the Family’s right hand man, Mister Ling.
When the turhtu come out, Robert almsot dies along with his sister and the others in Area 52. But I never felt comfortble just leaving his story at that. How would that impact me as a person? To be blinded by deceit on such a scale. So the Gift was born.
Robert isn’t handling things well and his father asks Varran to take the young man under his wing. Working with his sister and seeing the bigger picture might help him focu and move on. While on a planet they come across a girl, Zara, being hunted by dog like creatures. They rescue her and take her back to the Juggernaught. There they discover she can speak to the dead with mixed reactions from the others. An argument ensues and Robert takes her away and goes into hiding. needless to say they get closer as Zara brings Robert back from the edge.
My intention was that Robert would for the first time in his playboy life see someone on an emotional level. Zara is so uncomplicated that they connect and the tension builds between them. Zara is the first girl he has been with that sees him for who he is. I wanted the sex scene not to be gratuitous but to convey this isn’t just another of Robert’s casual flings but that it is him at his most vulnerable and open in front of Zara. But then I decided to cut it as the target is young adult. It’s hard to know because Buffy quite happily showed sex scenes on a regular basis and she was only supposed to be sixteen in the show. But in the end I was just thinking about if kids read it it would be too explicit for them and they’re exposed to far too much of that these days in thee world.
So here it is for your enjoyment. A real portrayal of two people giving in to very real feelings for each other or too much? Let me know in the comments especially if you have read the full story available now on Amazon as part of the Moon Once More collection.
THE GIFT DELETED SCENE
He kissed her softly, letting his hands run along across her thigh. He pressed against her before moving to her breasts. He began gently sucking the left one, feeling the nipple harden before flicking his tongue rapidly over it, stopping every couple of seconds to let his lips pull all he way to the top of it before beginning again. She moaned in pleasure as her hands ran along the back of his head, fingers ruffling his hair. He repeated the technique on her right breast letting his fingers tease the left one as he gently squeezed it. Her legs lifted up as her breathing intensified. He dragged his tongue down the centre of her body kissing the heaving hollow of her stomach as her back arched. He continued to her inner thighs in a mixture of kissing and tongue tracing along the line of her public hair before his tongue flicked her clitoris teasingly a couple of times. He was sweating as he rolled her onto her front and began kissing her on the small of her back travelling up to the top of her spine, his tongue stopping to trace the lines of her spine against her flawless skin. He paused as her scars stared at him, stark reminders of the past but he ran the tips of his fingers along them, including them as part of his tongue’s journey across her skin, showing her she need not hide them from him. Bracing himself up on both arms he started at one shoulder to the other kissing every inch of skin slowly feeling her move and moan beneath him. She turned her head to kiss him and he pressed his body down on hers allowing her to feel his erection against her. All he could think about was making her happy and never letting this feeling go. Even three weeks can be an eternity.
He lifted himself up to let her turn over on her back. She allowed him to position himself between her legs as she ran her hands across his hairy chest. She was so lithe and supple Robert could no longer hold his excitement and slipped inside her. Zara gasped as she felt his shaft move back and forth. He ran his hand over her quivering breasts taking his time to help her reach orgasm. His breathing quickened as he gasped with pleasure. She cried out as she dug her fingers into his back pulling out hairs, making him cry out as she urged him to go harder. He sped up feeling her vaginal lips tighten around his penis as she grabbed his behind urging him deeper. She trembled with pleasure as his thrust went up a notch. He could feel her sweaty skin on his as their lips met again tongues slipping against each other as Zara matched his rhythm at every thrust. She cried out as if she was about to explode. Sweat on his face, Robert deftly drew her left leg back towards her as he penetrated further making her dig her nails right into his back making him grunt in a mix of pleasure and pain. She screamed out as he felt her come just before he did. They lay there panting and sweating as he moved inside her slower now savouring each sensation.
She gasped pulling him in for a kiss. “I don’t want this to end.”
The Time Warriors and Beyond 